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Dear --,

When a flower blooms,
when the sun shines,
I think of you.

When the sun shines,
I think of you,
knowing my time draws near.

I think of you,
knowing my time draws near,
missing you with all my heart.

Knowing my times draws near,
missing you with all my heart,
I love you.

Missing you with all my heart,
I love you,
only to say good-bye.

I love you,
only to say good-bye,
forever I will love you.

Only to say good-bye,
forever I will love you,
without your love in return.

My heart and soul,
--
:iconzalisa:
I was trying a style bloodybeast has done before. I'm not quite sure if I used it correctly or not, so constructive critisim is appreciated. :)
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:iconcognition-incognito:
forget what alyssa said, its good, whether it follows form or not
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:iconcognition-incognito:
holy shit, how'd i miss this one?!
this is Amazing... the format is really cool. i dont think the format would work wiht any other topic.
:poke:
all i can say is this is simply...amazing
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:iconzalisa:
Well thank ya dawl!!
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:icon4pplemoon:
Oh, that's an unique format for a poem and the poem itself is touching. >_< I applaud ya! Keep it up!

PS- Thankies for the comments
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:iconzalisa:
Thank you very much. :bow: You're welcome for the comments.
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:iconearlbecke:
hey....I like this format. The repetition works nicely without being annoying. Very pretty poem. :)
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:iconzalisa:
Thank you very much, I'm glad you liked the format.
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:icond33pimpact:
I truely enjoyed the poem. What I liked about it was the emotion in it :). It really strung some heartstrings :nod:.

Well done inded, great job!

- Deep Impact
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:iconzalisa:
Well, thank you very much for such a sweet comment. :)
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